In todays modern world both men and woman share common roles when contributing to our society. Throughout the early 1900s the duty of an American woman has varied in its way. During this time woman were sought out to live the lifestyle of being a stay at home mom. With little to no contribution to our society or government, the hope and expectation for equality grew stronger and stronger. On August 18,1920 the 19th Amendment was passed to the Constitution of the United States. This amendment prohibits any United States Citizen from being denied the right to vote on the basis of sex. Changing history for the better this opportunity intern allowed woman to progress and prosper as individuals. With the 1930s around the corner this brings along the devastation of the Depression. As the stock market Crashed in 1929 the United States economy plummeted as well. While many began to lose there fortunes others began to lose there jobs no matter there race or gender. The fluctuation within our society began deteriorate individuals conscience, causing a change in personality. This change in personality is depicted through various films of the late and early 1930s. Alfred E. Green’s Baby Face ,Howard Hawk’s Bringing Up Baby and Gregory La Cava’s My Man Godfrey are amazing films that give depict what it was like to live during the depression. Each film ranging between the 1930s had there own distinct director who portrayed the lifestyles of individuals throughout this time period.
Hi Vijay,
ReplyDeleteI just wanted to make a few suggestions in regards to this paragraph. Look out for singulars and plurals. I see that you use the word "woman" throughout your sentences but the context indicates a plural subject meaning that it would be "women".
The fluidity of some of your sentences, I think are a little off too. For example:on...
Consider changing "on August 18,1920 the 19th Amendment was passed to the Constitution of the United States" into "The 19th amendment was passed on August 18, 1920". Another fragment of the paragraph I find to be obtuse - "Changing history for the better this opportunity intern allowed woman to progress and prosper as individuals. With the 1930s around the corner this brings along the devastation of the Depression. As the stock market Crashed in 1929 the United States economy plummeted as well.While many began to lose there fortunes others began to lose there jobs no matter there race or gender". Try this instead: This opportunity changed history for the better, allowing women to progress and prosper as individuals. A few years later in 1929 the stock market crashed leading to a plummeting economy. The great depression would be the leading cause of lost fortunes and scarce job opportunities."
DeleteYou always want to make sure that what your writing has a nice flow to it, otherwise you risk loosing your audience. Remember what Prof. Talbird said about making your essays entertaining as at the end of the day you are writing for someone else. Look out for your thesis statement too: what are you arguing + how are you going to prove it.
Overall, I do like the fact that your bring in a greater context into your argument. I've only ever seen one of the two films you listed and would be interested in reading the rest of your essay to see how you explore the other two films :)